Quarl AIM 2022 Review
Composition/Structure (0-10), Production (0-10), Emotion (0-10), Relevance to Artwork (0-10)
BusanBlack, Nightly Stunts: 10,7,7,2 (30/40)
Why is everyone writing such wonderfully inspired soundscapes? This has been a difficult competition to judge. I'll make sure to mention what I liked further below but I'm not going to waste anytime pointing out how you could have used the author's comments space to better illustrate connections the judges might have missed. It's a wonderful image but I'm not certain I can hear much of a connection to the art. By using the author's comments you can help draw connections to the inspirations. Was it the neon lights that inspired you? Is this music that would have playing inside the car? Rain on the window implies a white noise of percussive sounds, you could have sampled the sounds of a storm or rainfall and risked nothing. Judges for this contest are very laidback when samples are used. Google "YouTube one hour rainfall sounds" and use your audio programs to rip audio from your hard drive directly. So many of the meditation/sleep aid videos can be creatively applied to your work to help emulate an atmosphere. A free program like Audacity can grab the audio data off your hard drive when you're watching videos. This looks like a city street, some traffic sounds or car noises might have gently mixed well into the background. The environment in the car would give those sounds a slightly muted presence. Even at night, a city can have all sorts of sounds working in the background. Some synths or sounds panning from left to right or right to left could have created the illusion of movement. As your car drives past locations you might hear some loud noises coming from a car garage crescendo and decrescendo. You might hear soft beeps from a cross walk as you wait for the traffic lights to turn green. For such an inspiring image I feel you really missed an opportunity to make use of atmospheric sounds to put us inside this location. The song itself is well written and beautiful but I need some cues to make the inspirational connections, you can't expect the music to always speak for itself. Aside from samples, you could use instruments to symbolize certain elements of the landscape. Chimes might hang from a shop door and can crescendo or decrescendo. An arp synth could emulate an emergency vehicle you might pass on a city block. A simple sinewave moving from one side to the other could represent all sorts of things but you can always use your words to direct the listeners attention to something you may have intended.
I'm not certain I liked the climax compared to the ambiance in earlier sections. The hi-hat is the loudest instrument in the climax which was a little strange. You could have used a compressor and graphic EQ to bring out the lows in those drums, made them thunderous. An automation lane sending some spurts of reverb to the drums can make for a crescendo swell of tones, waves of sound. An odd snare drum with a ton of sudden reverb can be interesting and unexpected. So many people put static reverb units on stuff without thinking of how to use it emotively. Something else I'll mention is that you could layer a new snare drum on top of what you already have for most of the song different sections to help give some nice color to things (the snare at 1:35 seemed to pop more than it did in other sections). I loved the overall structure of the song. I've always been a fan of Explosions In The Sky and their style of building a slow crescendo. Since I gave you such a raw score for relevance I decided to be friendly with composition/structure. You do have some wonderful melodies but the theme of the competition is inspiration, you can't necessarily expect the judges to understand all of your intentions. Another competitor really impressed me with a synth that sounded like a race car engine. Another musician perfectly transported me to Japan with regional instrumentation and true to culture rubato. The sad two points I gave you for relevance was mostly because the image was peaceful, and the music was mostly peaceful but there was so much more that could have been done. Do understand that I enjoyed many aspects of your song. It was still good, despite me being perhaps too picky. Have a wonderful day Busan <3