Quarl AIM 2022 Review
Composition/Structure (0-10), Production (0-10), Emotion (0-10), Relevance to Artwork (0-10)
Lucas Berry, Dawn: 10, 8, 8, 5 (31/40)
The tune is great, it has a laid back fusion of styles and ideas going on. The guitars, pads, leads, melodies, and rhythms are all very relaxing. My biggest gripe is going to be how about how the work relates to the illustration. If it wasn't for the barn, this tune would match up nicely. Scenery translates well into musical ideas but I'm looking at that barn like something is out of place. You got sci-fi pads and techno risers kind of decorating the background of the song, but the barn is giving me a small Harvest Moon sensation. I could hear this track in a sci-fi game like Star Ocean or Mega Man Battle Network. You picked a landscape that was vague in some respects, which lends itself to be interpreted however you like. It would be strange to ask the artist to crop the barn from the image such that all we get is a lazy field with purple grass and a happy tree but it's up to us, the musicians to compliment these illustrations. All in all, I feel like the audio track is a little too "busy" and robust for the scenery. It's a wonderful track, the other judges might have their own opinions. All in all, it's a strong piece of work but I told myself at the onset of the competition that I wanted to hear music that lends itself so well to the art that the two mediums become inseparable. The song is a near fit but with all the amazing music cropping up this year, I'm not sure how this will hold up after I listen to some more works.
Since the barn felt by and large ignored, maybe I'd recommend some audio samples? Barns imply animal noises, birds, cats, cattle, horses clopping but it's night time, so most animals would be asleep? The leaves flying off the tree implies a lot of wind. As someone that lives in a very windy but peaceful valley the only "natural" rhythm section would be the sound of blowing grass and branches. I wouldn't want to recommend "unethical sampling" but if you want to risk grabbing some bird or wind noises from any random youtube video, we'd never know the difference unless you said so. I'd expect a professional to go grab field recordings of this stuff but I literally hold no one on Newgrounds to that same expectation. That barn really turns the piece into two separate landscapes, making this a surprisingly difficult landscape to adjust for. Yes, I mentioned you have a fusion of styles going on but the audio you made lends itself more towards spaceships than breezy fields. As a drummer, I hate suggesting less percussion but maybe you could have done more with less rhythm and focused instead on ambience? I'm not feeling a lot of structure in the scenery, it's very whimsical. Drums don't always lend themselves to a whimsical landscape. Windchimes would make sense hanging off that barn but that feels like a silly suggestion because I slut some windchimes into every song I write. It's fun percussion instrument because it lacks structure and sounds kind of like glitter tossed on top of the music. There are ways to use percussive instruments to create ambience but the jazz/rock fusion drums feel a little out of place when you put it next to the audio.
A mastering issue I'll point out but not take any points off for is that the track takes on some massive quality shifts between my Senhiessers and the Audio Technicas. Mastering is an issue literally everyone overlooks, myself included. I'll probably put out similar disclaimers on other comp tracks. Mastering is a hassle because the goal is to get your music to sound as true to the original recording on as many apparatuses as possible. I used to go crazy listening to my own music on everything I could get my hands on. From car speakers to PA systems to headphones, you'll learn techniques to avoid massive change from apparatus to apparatus. It can be a very embarrassing feeling when you go to bump your bass music on a friends monitors and there's no bass. I was actually surprised at the massive difference in quality, the track sounded much better on the Audio Technicas. It's a very popular brand on Newgrounds, I'm going to venture a guess that you might own a pair?
Does this track represent the visual? IMO: 5/10. I mentioned feeling very torn but I don't feel like the visual and the audio are inseparable from each other. The musical qualities are very strong but there is a lot strong audio production in this years field of contenders. I'd give you a 10/10 for just the audio but that's not going to be the focus of this competition. It's a tough competition to judge because people can have very strong audio compositions but very vague visual selections. This is a lot of stuff to think about if you want to jump into the fray again next year consider some of these ideas! Please don't get upset, you're obviously a very strong composer. I just think there were a few blind spots you could have worked out to really drive home the idea that the visual and the audio are inseparable from each other :)