I mean, I love it but I'm siding with Varsity. A high pitch sine wave or a punchy piano would make a great lead here. A motif melody can help the track stand out in someones memory. This track would be on another level with some kind of brain piercing lead.
Something else that helps a track stand out in someones memory is some kind of voice sample or audio clip. I mean, it would probably change what you were going for but something as simple as Homer Simpson saying "doh" softly in the background over and over again with slight reverb would have helped the track stand out a bit.
Do it.