kittens
Pretty good track. The EQ needs a bit of work, cause the mix sounds just a tad dull, but the elements are all there. Maybe try a sharper snare/ hi-hat. You might benefit by cutting the length of the bass kick and EQing it a tad louder, but that may not work... dunno. Just gotta experiment with it a bit till you get a sound that's just a little more powerful.
Cleaning up the drums will improve the track quite a bit. The piano sounds great, but you might want to try taking spirits advice. Dunno. Really it's the drums that I think need the most work. Everything else works out all right.
Keep up the sly tactics :D