People don't like leaving critiques because it can feel disrespectful. I'm not one to comment on visual arts often anymore. Growing up I always hated critical feedback, I'd get so defensive. Maybe I'm worried that people might respond to criticism in the same way that I used to.
I wanted to create everything in a vacuum. My highschool drawing teacher would pull up a chair, start making amendments on student drawings, and when it was my turn to get sketched on I'd crumple up the paper and start over just for his reaction. As an adult, that story feels awkward to tell because I needed that kind of instruction and refused it like a petulant child. In college I learned to take crits. The entire process involved working on hundreds of drawings nonstop, putting them up on a wall for the entire class to see, then going through each and every individual piece of work and talking about what we liked or what we didn't. It was always a battle, we'd argue sometimes but I kind of miss that.
Maybe the reason I don't leave reviews on newgrounds visual arts is because many drawings here are perfect for what they are. So many artists on newgrounds have their own style and vibe. In university, drawing class was mandatory. We'd use charcoal, vine and compressed. The end goal was probably photo realism but only a few of us ever got that good. Here on newgrounds, the end goal is whatever the artist wants it to be. I don't want to ruin that journey with needless critical input. Usually, the only thing a newgrounds artist ever need to keep going is a little love.
So you're style here is far from photo realism. I couldn't begin to tell you what direction to take because it's already a huge improvement from the old drawing and anything I would have told you back then has already been done here. It really is a unique style and the execution blows me away. If I were to force myself into a crit, all I got to say is that you should draw more regardless of style to push your boundaries. Pick up a sketch pad and do still life drawings, landscapes, animals, figure drawings... everything. It's easy to put ourselves into comfort zones and only do certain types of drawings or avoid styles that make us upset with our limitations. Maybe the reason I stopped drawing is because I got tired of feeling uncomfortable.
Probably another reason I don't leave reviews on visual arts is because even when something floors me, I feel dumb just saying "this is good." I never liked being a fan girl. I'd rather leave that positive feedback for the kids that need more practice to motivate them into improving on their own. I think simply saying "good job" to someone is just as important as leaving a critique but I truthfully have trouble doing that. The young and amateur artists need positive reinforcement more than they need direction because critiques can weigh heavily on people. Artists improve on their own when poked or prodded. I guess that's what's happening with my subconscious logic?
I'm contradicting myself, certainly. While I think leaving positive reinforcement is more important than leaving critical reinforcement, I have trouble doing exactly that because of personal feelings. I'm being very honest with you because we got some history, so most of these ideas are simply feelings and poorly worded. Know that I stopped by this drawing earlier and didn't say anything because I didn't want to say simply "good job."
You did a good job.